- Outline for Freshman Comp Essay
Question at issue: | Did you agree to an abortion to appease a sister? |
Question at issue: | What did you fear? |
Question at issue: | Are a bomb and an abortion detonated the same? |
Possible thesis statement: | Maybe not a sensible idea to allow someone else to determine the future. |
Refined thesis statement: | Maybe not because appeasement, some historians say, (endnotes) started World War II. |
Possible topic sentence: | To acquiesce to an abortion or a war becomes expansively problematic. |
Possible evidence: | Irrational to follow the middle sister who never wanted you near. |
Possible evidence: | For example, she sequestered you in the attic, |
swearing on your life she would do it again if you told. | |
She knew no one would believe you: you—still a week from four years old. | |
Afterwards, you learned silence. The tilt of gravity, the blankness of it, blue cold on the edge of your sky. | |
[Possible evidence] | Because for example, three decades on. The abortion still suspended in resin like a tiny scorpion, transforms anger into amber. |
Because in my body, this was motherhood’s last stand. | |
Counter argument: | But you were already adult, your mid-twenties. |
Counter argument: | Did she hold a knife to your vagina, conduct the surgery herself? |
Refuting argument: | She chauffeured me there, commented on my blistered toes. |
Counterargument: | But you walked into the abortionist’s office, undressed, welcomed the plastic mask of anesthesia. (You wanted this.) |
Refuting argument: | Yes. The abortionist was handsome. Bronzed in an orange kind of way. |
And they flirted and laughed well, spoke of island travel. | |
Then as if at the moving pictures, I disappeared | |
into the gallery seats. Watched another show. | |
My sister gave him her number— she’d make the appointment, the follow-up. | |
Refuting argument: | Wanted out. Wanted none of it. None of this ever happened. |
[ ] | To wake and have no memory— |
[ ] | Locked away without a way. |
[ ] | If I didn’t make the choice but it was the right choice. |
If I made the choice but it was the wrong choice. | |
If I could go back and find my own way. | |
Unintended consequences: | The rest of my life. |
I will never visit Paris or acquiesce again. | |
For two decades we have not spoken. | |
Possible conclusion: | Yes. No. Yes. No. War of the abortion comes and goes. |
Possible conclusion: | Mybodymmybodybodymyboymybodymy bodymybomb— |
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Susan Rich is a professor of English and Film Studies at Highline College. Her fifth book, Gallery of Postcards and Maps: New and Selected Poems, is forthcoming from Salmon Press, and her sixth book, Blue Atlas, is forthcoming from Red Hen Press.